So in the meantime, I'm posting the first scene as it is, cluttered thoughts. This is romance, my way.
PAUL - charming, easygoing, magnetic. mid-20s.
- works part time at his uncle's shop. a freelance artist.
- sparkling chocolate eyes.
simple and regal. mid-20s.
- junior associate to a famous lawyer in town. is a young lawyer
trying to make her way to the business.
RITA - shopkeeper in the massage shop with retail beauty products.
- adores Paul as her sort-of son but makes it appear she doesn't.
SHOP. Morning. Around 9am. Paul visits the shop.
Three times a week, Paul checks on the shop to see how it's doing.
Paul checks the files and makes sure that everything is in proper order.
Shop door bell chimes, signalling someone coming in.
Rita looks up sees it's Paul. Sighs, appears bored, continues to wipe
PAUL : (starts gaily) Goodmorning Rita. It's a beautiful day, ain't it?
RITA : (moodily) Urngh.
PAUL : Ritaaaa, you know, smiling isn't a sin. It wouldn't kill you to
smile once in a while. You'll look even prettier than you already are
if you smile.
Paul starts leafing through the shop files.
Rita rolls her eyes but is really flattered at being called pretty.
Shop door bell chimes again, in comes Amy.
Paul smiles at Amy. Paul is attracted to Amy and has been looking
for a good opportunity to ask her out.
AMY : Goodmorning.
PAUL : Hi Amy. What brings you here? (surprised but glad)
AMY : Boss needs some more of your eye cream. She says it works
wonders on her eyes, even better than the designer brands.
(eyes twinkle with mirth)
PAUL : But of course. (laughs) Your boss needs more than eye cream
though. Does she ever sleep at all?
Paul recalls the bags under Amy's boss's sharp face
AMY : Four hours a night at most. (shrugs)
PAUL : Damn. (Hands Amy a box of eye cream) Here you go, ma'am.
AMY : (raises one eybrow, reaching for the box) Thanks.
PAUL : (touches Amy's hand) You look beautiful, Amy.
AMY : (smiles, retrieves the box) Kidder.
PAUL : (seriously, shakes head slightly) I'm not kidding.
AMY : Um hey, I have to go.
PAUL : Oh. Ok. See ya.
Amy leaves the shop.
RITA : Still haven't had the courage to ask her out?
PAUL : (sadly) Nope. Can't find the right moment. You heard her, I was
gonna ask her for dinner tonight. But she has to go to work.
RITA : Moment, schmoment.
PAUL : (theatrically) You gotta wait for that perfect moment
when her eyes meet yours and you just know she's
gonna say yes. (wistful) Isn't she beautiful?
RITA : All girls are beautiful to you, boy.
PAUL : (solemnly) Not all, Rita, not all. Just you and Amy.
RITA : Yea, yea.
Rita turns her back to Paul and smiles.
-End of scene-
Okay now I'm sleepy and feel light-headed. Not sure how many grammatical or typographical errors I've made, but they're there somewhere, no nitpicking as of the moment. Bedtime now. :)